Exploratory Self- Reflection
Sarelle Alcantara
FIQWS 10103
In the process of my Exploratory Essay revision, the first thing I did was review my
comments that I received on the last one. I was told to fix my “wordiness” and to avoid using
plenty of words to describe something that could be straight to the point. The second step in my
process was letting my mother read through my essay. She agreed with the comments that were
given to me from my professors and also gave me her own feedback as well. She believed that I
put too many large quotes in my essay and she stated that it didn’t go well with the wordiness in
my essay. She advised me to get straight to the point and only use quotes that were absolutely
necessary. I then took all my feedback and used this to enhance my essay. My mother helped me
find more peer reviewed academic sources as I struggled with finding these sources originally.
As far as genre goes, I also slightly changed my topic. In my first essay I would constantly
and repetitively state that language and communication are the same thing. However, after doing
more research, I changed my entire thesis and made it clear that although they have a hand in
hand relationship they are not the same, they simply work together. I discussed the relationship
between language and communication and the impact it has amongst humans. My overall
motivation for this essay was my history of having poor communication skills. I hoped to
enlighten and show the significance of communication on humans and their daily lives along
with its benefits and tied it into how language influences that. When I first think of language, I
think of communication and that is why I took the angle I did when writing my essay. I tried to
stay as straight to the point as possible, illustrating the knowledge I’ve obtained through
exploring this topic as well as providing evidence to support my claims as well.
My biggest problem when writing essays is having a bias and or including my opinion
within my essays. After reading my essay I did notice I used my opinion in some areas, along
with terms such as “we” , “I” and “our”. I had to take out these words along with removing my
opinion from any areas within my essay. I have a tendency of flowing when writing and this
causes me to do such things like including myself. I made sure to revise this and sound as formal
as I could. Overall I feel as though I applied all the feedback I received into the writing of this
essay. I believe I achieved my goals and approached the audience with a straightforward and
clear perspective, along with providing enough knowledge and evidence to support the
significance language has on communication.
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